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Callum & Harper - Fisher Amelie I have a love/hate relationship with this story. FA's novel, Vain, sits happily on my favorite shelf and I picked up this book expecting the same quality. These are the reasons I wanted to rate this one star and stop reading a dozen times: This is a first draft manuscript. Has to be. The editing problems are distracting, the writing is sloppy, and narrative tense is inconsistent throughout. Then there's the contrived drama. The H/h are interrupted Every. Single. Time they attempt a kiss or some semblence of communication. They live together for two years, joined at the hip, yet neither bother to voice their love for the other, and--Holy Unbelievable Batman--they are both virgins and do not have sex??? They're 18-20 years old and hot as hell for each other, and they do not have sex? That's...that's...uh, no. You might be able to believe that two orphan 18-year-olds living on the streets are able to hang on to their v-cards--in a fictional world maybe--if you're given a plausible reason, but hot and horny Callum just wants to hold his virginity close to his heart. Really? This is only one of many examples of how Callum does not behave or think like a man/boy. In fact, his character is so underdeveloped, it blends into Harper's. Often, they could be the same person. This is made worse because both POVs are written in first person.These are the reasons I finished the book: The body of beliefs and social conflicts that characterize the storyline are compelling and have so much damn potential. Two homeless orphans--tragic individually--are devasting together. The unfortunate external events that happen to them throughout the story are enough to make their romance and friendship beautifully heartwrenching. Why they had to ruin it with their non-communicative passive stupidity is beyond me. But it's the external circumstances that might have you relishing the final 20% of the book. The HEA is wholly satisfying. If the editing problems were resolved, I'd probably rate this 4 star for the ending alone.